Up High Above – rondeau for Friday Fictioneers


up high above the lights shine through
I wonder where my freedom flew
in chthonic darkness of my cell
if spring or fall I cannot tell
my sooty misery below

you left me after brief adieu
the tender kiss like honey dew
it lingers to recall your smell
up high above

your luscious letters were too few
and since my dark suspicion grew
I send you darkness to compel
I send you sickness in my spells
in death and pain you will be true
up high above

This week’s picture draw me into fixed form poetry, but I still wanted to tell a story. It’s hard to do in exactly 100 words, this week slightly below (only 87 words). My apologies.

Friday Fictioneers is a wonderful group of bloggers who constantly stretch themselves in writing stories to the same picture. Rochelle does an exquisite work in keeping the community together.



March 19, 2014

52 responses to “Up High Above – rondeau for Friday Fictioneers

  1. Very clever use of the prompt, Bjorn. You actually got a lot of information in for the number of words. It sounds like a kind of gentle revenge, if there is such a thing. Well done.

  2. Dear Björn,

    Chthonic. You taught me a new word. 😀 I like that. Your reading gives your already stunning poem both depth and weight. Gave me shivers.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  3. 13 words less – still packed in so much beauty.. absolutely loved the format. The love and revenge both intrigued me.

  4. Learned two new words today, Bjorn–chthonic and dornick (suggested rhyme, meaning small stone). The vengeance conjured “in chthonic darkness of my cell” far transcends the need for throwing dornicks at the one “up high above”– I just hope I, personally, stay on your good side.

  5. Bjorn, very good poetry. I agree with Amy above – poetry sounds better read with feeling. I think she will be sorry in the end! Thanks, Nan 🙂

  6. It seems like a lot of us found a new word. Well done Bjorn! I read it first, then listened to you and read it while you talked. It was marvelous! Your accent and voice made it all the more creepy. Really good!

  7. Add me to list of vocabulary students. I LOVE learning new words. The added soundcloud recording gets you off the hook for the 87 words. 😉 The tone was fabulous if eerie. I enjoyed that the content was so much darker then the lilt of the rondeau.

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