they are the salmon sushi kind of girls
chic chicks’ chitter-chatter lunch-break
handbags larger than they ever need
filled with clothes & Harlequin adventures
blonde hair and magazinely perfect lips
but deep behind mascara lashes – dreams
of the barefoot sea-side, dipping toes
slip in tepid water – simple life, and poetry
of rolling waves they’ll never will admit
in their gym-instructor giggling talk
they are the salmon sushi kind of girls
chic chicks’ chitter-chatter lunch-break
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For dVerse Brian want’s us to describe characters in poetry at dVerse MTB. My lunch break provided me with inspiration. Pub opens at 3PM EST.
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Björn Rudbergs writings 
I’ve met these girls, darling. Really enjoyed this… the playful indictment of the frivolous, the chatty rhythm, everything. Very nice.
Thank you.. yes to capture the persona.. in poetry one has to go into familiarity I think… 🙂
Very light-hearted and interesting. I think most of us have known that type. Well done.
Ah thank you 🙂 a very cool challenge.. really.
ha. great capture of these girls…the alliteration/onamonepoea of chitter chatter….is nice…adding a layer…the never telling the gymn instructor made me smile…you capture a bit of our quirkiness in this…fun piece bjorn
i do like my sushi though…smiles.
Me too… but I like other thing than just the salmon kind…. to me that was part of the irony (but it might only be applicable hear in Sweden)…
Thank you… I had some help in writing short fiction… 🙂 a great prompt…
The alliterative lines really captured the type of girls you are describing. Supremely superficial in their speech and manner…and yet very real people at their core (even if they refuse to acknowledge that)
Ah.. exactly what I wanted to bring forth.. 🙂
You gave me a huge SMILE today. 😉 Plus, I often refer to certain people as magazine beautiful.
Thank you so much.. 🙂
chic chicks’ chitter-chatter…that just captures the feel of them perfectly… i know some of them me thinks…well captured..
Thank you .. yes city girls look like this..
I do hope they drop the bag one day and allow themselves to live truly.:)
I think so.. they will find a path.. so nice to see them.
I really enjoyed this and see a lot of these girls in and around where I work… Thank you for giving me a hint ahead of time what tonight’s theme is – I can ponder on my journey home…
One of the purposes.. for the pubhosts to have the prompts ahead of time… look forward to your work.
Your refrain is perfect, Bjorn, and for some reason, even the color and texture of salmon resonate. Very well done.
Ha.. yes only special girls are specialized on salmon sushi.
a fun piece indeed, Bjorn, and great energy, gentleness, and keen eye for these young ladies; love the fact that you were so kind in your assessment, giving them credit for still reading romance novels, still liking poetry, and nature at the sea. Perhaps one of them will become a lawyer, or go into politics, & the other will drop the pretenses & become a feminist poet, a lesbian leader, a famous person’; see you painted such a vivid alive portrait, the options become vivid & varied.
I think they are much more than they even dare to admit to themselves… that’s why they probably feel better when they grown up …
Your poem reminded me of a place in Stockholm where I had sushi in September! I enjoyed the alliteararions and the portrait of these young women. Hopefully some of them will indeed turn into deeper people than they look.
Ha,.. yes maybe sushi in Stockholm is filled with these girls… and lunch breaks can be like this…
I meant ‘alliterations’, of course!
You have brought these salmon sushi girls to life. I think I would recognize them now if I saw them from your vivid description!
Ha.. yes but there are quite a few of them…
The breeziness that blew through the poem – start to finish – drew me with it, smiling at these girls – healthy, bright, cheery with many doors ahead to open, with a thousands worlds to discover. Loved it.
I think they are quite sweet.. and they usually make a lot of impact.. hopefully they will dare to open doors that lead them right.
I can definitely see them, and hear their giggles. 🙂 Peace, Linda
Delightful to read Bjorn…I have a sister who would fit in quite nicely with this group, and I know she has dreams of better things to come.
Picture perfect . . . mmmm I’d love me some sushi right about now.
Oh the barefoot toe dipping….fun, Bjorn.. the young ladies will soon grow into womanhood and learn
You aced it, Bjorn! I like the repetition at the beginning and end, and the salmon sushi kind of accentuates the fakeness of their appearance, cool how you mirrored them in the sushi!! Also, I am learning about the contradiction, which adds depth to the character, as you did here with their rather simple dreams, kind of sad. Very believable.
I can picture them in yoga class … whispering there gossip while maintaining their poses. I really like the chic line…it just rolls off the tongue perfectly.
Ah, I see you’ve been to California. Or is it that these creatures are everywhere? Enjoyed this one. Thanks for sharing.
This really caught my attention for the repeated lines and the girls’ sad sort of hidden unhappiness. It’s quite striking.
Oh so well done BR – so realistic..and age begets wisdom – the bags will drop soon enough.
Great writing Bjorn. I can see these girls, lost in the guise of designer bags and outward appearances, really wishing for simpler things.
This is excellent Bjorn, a clear depiction of character, I have taught some of them I am sure.
Everyone is writing fun poetry tonight as it seems – much to my amusement. Here, I could see the characters – common, real and lively.
Definitely blond and airbrushed but oh, so chic – like salmon sushi! Enjoyed this.
ah… though my friends and I are not blonde, somehow, I see younger versions of us in this poem. 🙂
Uh oh…not dreaming of the simple life at the beach or poetry at all…those big handbags are necessary:)
Cool and crisp and celebratory. You give them inner life as well as blondness, bags and salmon sushi. Great word play
This was delicious Bjorn-loved the rhythm and that underneath all that superficiality they want simpler joys of life but would never admit it:-)
sounds summery =)
I think I’ve met those girls! Your description of them and the poetic imagery painted a vivid picture.
Sushi!
Wonderful writing, Bjorn! You nailed it, them, etc. Very nicely done!
This is a refreshing poem (set of characters) –nothing too unusual … well described.
well done indeed, I can see them so clearly, because I have and very often…I enjoyed this very much!
Ha! A lovely description of the salmon sushi kind of girls. A fun read. 🙂
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Ha! Those girls! I like this. Well done.
I am so, so glad Helena sent me here!
Ha. we have a lot of fun with poetry 🙂
Oh my gosh, B. This is AWESOME!!! You need to link this again, like for OLN or something. It’s super fun, and De will love this too. Yes it definitely sounds like us on a girl date. 🙂
I loooooooove this! 😉