fedora bank-day longings


black fedora
frayed white shirt
and the tie untied
subway saturday
subconsciously
a bank-day for him
lonely dinner waits
dreaming of monday
exhaling february air
coughing out his loneliness

The man with the fedora walks home

The man with the fedora walks home

Another verbatim sketch I made on the subway today. It’s also my 1000th post… yay.. Linked to dVerse.

February 8, 2014

14 responses to “fedora bank-day longings

  1. coughing out his loneliness…heck that is an image that will stick with me… woot… congrats on 1000 posts and you really made me see the man

  2. february air…i like how you use the month there…i feel for the man…alone….going somewhere on the subway…..
    woot on 1000…
    just wrote a second one myself i might post in the morning.

  3. Congratulations on your 1000th post, Bjorn!! I feel sorry for this lonely guy….who eats alone, looks forward to a working Monday!

  4. 1,000th post.. how cool is that! Wow.. you are a rockstar.. And the poem.. terrific.. that last line clinches the image. I can see and hear him.

  5. How sad is that! Waiting for Monday as if the office is his salvation.
    Very sharp verbal portrait, with both the outside and the inside delineated.

  6. A though provoking one for your 1000th post. On of my favourites.Coughing out his loneliness. A sad but pertinent line. Also a lot of men work late at the office because they don’t want to go home.
    Another side of the coin. The pic was perfect for the poem.

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