The first time I saw your moist lips,
I was lost in lust.
But I missed the hint of fangs,
and the hot kiss changed a bit,
as you bit me.
Now I’m white and cold
with fangs.
From Wikimedia Commons
Linked to Trifextra where we should add 33 words to this “The first time I saw…” and only use one syllable words.
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January 13, 2014
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Sensual and creepy at the same time. Nicely done.
Creepy is good ..
OUCH! (but in such a good way)
I love when you write like this. It reads like I imagine a purr would sound.
Thank you so much.. I can’t wait to read your piece.
So good in such a bad way. So smooth then…
smooth operator that gal
Excellent Bjorn and bears out my belief that we should be careful of who we kiss.
A kiss of darkness is seldom good.
lol…yes you never know who it might be…..
I knew where it was going and it still hit me hard and satisfactory. Tight writing. Well done.
somehow there has to be a twist…
Nicely done! Your words flow so beautifully.
Thank you.. that’s great coming from you.
A great poem Björn. Lust will always blind you to those fangs!
I think it’s the essence of vampirism
This is great. All those tasty sounds you mix together, so evocative, sensual and inviting. Fab job! Thanks for linking up!
Thank you.. loved the prompt
Ah yes, the Bjornmeister does not disappoint!
Ah thank you Ted
The curse of the dangerous mouth. I’d be powerless to resist a sensual Dracula type myself. This was stunning work, Bjorn!
Ha.. yes I guess that I’m irresistible now 🙂
Don’t men know that an alluring woman always ends up being a pain in the neck?! hehe Fun & sensual take!
ha,.. very good.. 🙂
So…who did you kiss next?
It seems like anyone lusting for a pale dark gentleman might be up for the next kiss.
As always, this is beautifully arranged and so wonderfully inspired. Well done, Björn :)) P.S. All mouths are dangerous – just in different ways 😉
It’s the most dangerous part of the human body.
Ooh, I like it.
Creepy, Björn, and with quite the biting rhythm!
i LOVE your story…and your new fangs, Bjorn. ha-ha. 🙂
That’s one alluring mouth and piece of writing I wouldn’t mind being bit by. (;
This is what happens when you think with the little head and not the big head! 🙂 Nice tale told in those 33 words. 🙂
Oh, great write. “I missed the hint of fangs.” Perfect.
Great perspective – I love it.
Vampire! scary.
Ah a mixture of Lust with fangs 😀 Amazing totally amazing.
ah we can def get sucked into the pretty package and miss the danger…that is for sure…ha
I’m still laughing. Very good!
DJ
This was cool. I don’t usually get into vampire stuff…but this was superb and so creative…I just had to love it. ♥
“Twilight” summed up in 38 words. But far more poetic! 🙂 Awesome work.
Too bad you saw her lips in the moon’s glow, for if it were daylight, you would have noticed the moisture was blood. Sexy poem Bjorn!
This sounds like a little real life mixed with film noir. Excellent and creative use of the prompt.
The poetry is beautiful.
i love this. especially how you used bit in two different ways back to back like that. excellent write!
They do say love is blind (cliché alert!) but in this case, true.
Love is not blind… Lust is
Love bites haha
Sexy and creepy. Great combo!