30 responses to “Fists – triolet”

1. I think this is splendid. Did you mean to write “has” no tears?

   • Of course… of course…

   • And many thanks for the kind words.

2. This really struck a chord with me and made me cry. I had to deal with domestic violence for a number of years and this spoke volumes to my heart. You said so much with few words.

   • I think it’s a shame it exist… and I would never use my fists.. even though I sometimes lack words to express my frustration…

     • Would never think of you the type to use your fists. Everyone gets frustrated but that is why you walk away if you can’t talk it out.
       The abuse doesn’t start with physical, it is rooted in emotional and mental areas. Physical seems to be the last part. Very vicious cycle.

3. The repetitive nature of your triolet is so apt to your subject today: the cycle of abuse seems inescapable. I would certainly agree that this social travesty is worthy of protest.

4. ‘and talks possession with his fists’…..the image has a great impact…

5. ugh…what a nasty nasty place of being…he feeling powerless in nothing but her fear and his ability to beat her up…i feel for her…and whatever caused her to fall in with such a weak man….

6. echoing Kerry, the form really suits the subject. strong write, Bjorn ~

7. Wow, powerful write Bjorn. Love how you tackled this topic.

8. a powerful punch against abuse & the perfect form for it really, the way the repetitions hammer away at the point

9. Having “been there done that” long, long ago … I can say that you captured the situation well. Excellent.

10. Whew. You tell it pretty directly! It would take a very sick mind to see this as anything but protest.

11. How sad is that! Very well penned.
    -HA

12. well done, very strong, powerful reality, which I always fail to understand why it happens.

13. excellent, excellent. we should all be yelling about this of course. the form really works, too.

14. This is fantastic. The triolet really underlines the message and hits its home. Wise grasp of domestic abuse in he “talks possession with his fists.” That is domestic abuse in a nutshell, my friend. Well said.

15. Very powerful, Bjorn. It brings awareness to a serious issue … domestic abuse. Works well in the triolet to make a strong point.

16. Bjorn, sorry for the recent absence (periodic depression).
    I think this fits the prompt perfectly. It’s especially important for men to write about and speak out against domestic abuse, because it’s usually a man who’s the perp. The domination shown by this man is both scary and so real. An amazing poem, sir. Peace, Amy

17. This hits home for me…my youngest daughter was abused as was my sister. This speaks so powerfully of the tragedy a fist can bring Thank you so much for taking part in the challenge.

18. Whew, Bjorn. Anyone who takes possession with their fists is a bit questionable to me. A strong poem, good form.

19. your poem powerful and yes, sad that such abuse exists.

20. Excellent write, Bjorn, and wonderful to see a man write about domestic abuse. I see Amy has already said that, but it bears saying again. Women are certainly entitled to rail against the horrors, but a man writing with clarity and finality carries a real punch, if you’ll pardon the pun.
    K

21. So powerful, so sad one would resort to using their fists and feed on another’s fear. Splendid work.

22. The form and subject go well togehter. The first line is so powerful asp. when repeated.

23. Absolutely in keeping with Susie’s challenge … domestic abuse is horrific, makes me furious.

24. Uh–very visceral piece today–touched us all I think

25. Lack of restraint and control leads to this. These qualities are not natural and strategies must be learned and instilled from day 1…otherwise it is too late.

26. Very strong and uncomfortable imagery.

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