1, Under cherry trees, falling petals covers his discarded syringe.
2. Beside the highway, when fertilized by road kills, dandelions thrive.
3. As pedestrian’s feet unwillingly crushes the passing cockroach.
4. Protected by eaves in the falling autumn rain, joint remained unlit.
5. The old prostitute still share her last meager meal with an alley cat.
Alley from Wikimedia Commons
In dVerse Form for All we are writing “American Sentences” with Gay – combining beat poetry with haiku. 17 syllables, gritty and real. My effort are the above 5 poems. Join us at 3 PM EST for even better efforts.
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November 14, 2013
Björn Rudbergs writings 
So very excellent!
Thank you.. I hope you join tonight..
nice….like that last one…..no matter our circumstances there is still always someone else you know…the first one was sad a bit…the junkie under the tree…the beauty and the grit….
Thanks .. these were fun to write.. wanted to have that contrast
All are good Bjorn ~ Specially 2 and 5, the contrast & imagery are sharp ~
No sweat on the form, smiles ~
Have done a few one-line haiku… 🙂 more a subject change
Makes me thoughtful…beauty out of ashes.
Thank you .. 🙂
the dandelions fertilized by roadkills…goodness…that made me shiver…the roach as well…don’t like em…ugh… cool verse sir björn..smiles
every one of them was haunting, as if you want to look away, but it’s life and you can’t.
I was “taken” with each one of them.
Each one is good, Bjorn. I especially like the #2. Dandelions can grow anywhere. Smiles.
Very effective Björn! We can tell you are a haiku ‘specialist’. I find the first one very powerful.
Those are so beautifully written… each one of them tells a story. Great job.
Absolutely loved the last one. Very classy. >KB
Thank you 🙂
Bjorn – such pathos in so few words – really loved these – K
Thank you .. this was really a great prompt.
amidst the waste, destruction, and sadness, you end with beauty and kindness. Liked these a lot.
What I really loved about these American haiku, is that you used a lot of grit, Ginbergian Beat imagery; muscular, witty, sad, angst; I really liked 1, 2, & 5, sir.
Heady mix, Bjorn. I see it as a base for several poems. Maybe I don’t quite get the point of this form, other than note taking.
Very cool……..I especially like the prostitute sharing her meal with the alley cat.
The cat in the alley sees all, and is quite a philosopher. I can imagine the conversation at the prostitute’s last meal. I found it sad, so much random death as part of everyday.
Not only captured the rudiments of the form, but the essence of it as well. Each capturing “a moment” – beauty and pain in each. Really well done!!
LIKED all of these, but the first one brought memories so real…
But rain unites with light, though, by the rainbow only.
Excellent portrayal (of the shadows) of street life Björn. And I do so relate to the fourth…(:o])
Anna :o]
Gritty, real and well done! Very well done.
Loved the undercurrent in all of your american sentences. Living on the edge of pain in all of them. Real.
Awww! This is great. I love the all the contrast and imagery. 🙂
Witty! Reading – a revelation…
Bjorn, all very good and filled with grit..enjoyed the audio presentation as well as always…
Love how you’ve group these together and such a great title. Very impressive!
Well done. You captured the gritty well.
you absolutely nail juxtaposition. Each is a tiny, sharp vignette that brings up a sudden rush of emotion. nicely done!
I like how the words “trees”, “feet”, “eaves” add rhythm to the collection of American sentences.
especially loved the last one.. very nicely done, as always, Bjorn
Really gritty, all of them. The last one is especially effective.
Vivid images!
Great!