65 responses to “Music’s gone – rondeau for Friday Fictioneers”

1. Wonderfully written as always….you are still one of my favorites to read. I love music, but agree at times it can be too loud which my busy mind too chaotic.

   • and for a musician it’s even louder.

2. “Old Rocker” eh? This was fun, I got the feeling that it was a bit challenging to write.

   • With forme fix there are not a lot of variations… but once you get started it just comes along.

3. Made my ears ring just reading it. 🙂 I like what you said about his soul being tainted and about the violence of his songs. Just one note, er, letter, missing–an “n”: “he sits i silence.”

   janet

   • Ha… I will add my own recitation later… and thank you for spotting the lost letter 🙂

4. Love the rhythm of this piece, makes it easier to read and take in.

   • The poets knew what they did when using iambs… 🙂

5. Absolutely love this. Beautiful form and language. 🙂

   • Thank you .. Rondeau’s are quite fun to write..

6. Nicely done Bjorn.

   • Thank you Sandra

7. Bjorn I love this rondeau and even more so the fact that you included the recording. I love hearing poetry in the artist’s voice. particularly apt for a musically influenced piece. I attempted a rondeau once and found ti utterly challenging. You made it look easy to me.

   • I have written a few before.. but it is one of the harder forms…

     • Really hard I’d say. So serious *clap clap clap* from me.

     • Sestina … that’s much harder… so extremely challenging it takes days to write..

     • Sestinas are the devil. 😉

       I tried it only once. I couldn’t for the life of me find the flow and by the end hated the five words I chose.

8. It seems as though you know of what you write.

   • to some extent… but I still love listening to music

9. I enjoyed reading this. As a musician, I can hear the rhythm in the words you’ve chosen and they work well together. I also enjoyed listening to you read it. 😀

   • Thank you.. rhythm is very important in my poetry.. I try to lift some of that to my prose too. but it’s fun to adopt to the beat of iambs.

10. I find it interesting that with the keyboard this week, so many have told the story with the music of poetry. You make this look effortless.

    • Ah… I have not looked into so many yet.. but to me the picture screamed poetry.

11. Dear Björn,

    What a delight to not only read your voice, but to hear it as well. Thank you for including the recording. Nicely done. 😀

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Thank you.. it’s a lot of fun to try to record poetry.

12. Dear Bjorn,

    Bravo! Encore please. The poem was wonderful as read and then recited in your voice it was even better. I love the broad swath you cut into all forms of the written word.

    Superb.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • Thank you.. Stretching yourself in form and expression is one of the reason’s I write.

13. A sad description of a music lover…
    Well done!

    • Sad .. for him .. maybe blessing for others.

14. Wonderfully done, Bjorn.

    • Thank you.. rondeau is a little specialty of mine.

15. A wonderful from me too Björn – love it!
    Anna :o]

    • Thank you 🙂

16. Great job.

17. Love the pacing and rhythm of this piece. Such wonderful piece, Björn, in so few words. Masterful.

18. Music does get too loud for me, rather easily. I like to be able to hear myself think, lol. I can’t wait to come back to listen to the recording when I’m at a computer with sound. Interesting piece.

    • Thank you .. and so nice to have you back here.. 🙂

19. Your poetry is sublimely beautiful, as always. I’m so glad you included the audio file as well. I think it really adds something to hear this form of poetry as spoken word, and your voice does it justice. Lovely!

    • Thank you.. yes I just started to read my poetry.. sometimes it’s not clear how the rhythm has been planned .. so I thought it would be fun..

20. I’d have never rhymed it with cocaine ! I’m impressed at the fine tuning in your poetry! Sincerely Deborah

    • Thank you Deborah.. I thought of the effect music can have on you… but also sometimes when you find a rhyme you form the poem around it…

21. I love the sound and rhythm of this. It’s music.

22. its a sad day when the music stops
    then again there are def songs i cant listen to any more
    for what they do to me. smiles…

23. I’m glad you were in the mood you were in. It played like a song.

24. Once again, a wonderful rondeau. I hope the music never stops – of all types, even the ones I don’t appreciate.

25. Hi Bjorn,

    Another round from you and I did enjoy this one, I don’t want the music
    to ever stop may we always hear that beat. I think you have mastered
    this form sir..I had a bit of trouble with it.

26. I enjoyed the read Bjorn ~ Very lovely cadence of the words 🙂

27. When music’s gone…what a horrifying thought!

28. Very evocative. I can see you’re quite at home with this form.

29. Very good!

30. just reading about music being gone, I miss it

31. Wonderful! Loved the sound section, too!
    Scott
    Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/10/23/friday-fictioneers-ff-102513-personal-music-pg13/

32. Nicely done, interesting form.
    Makes AnElephant think, no easy task!

33. Very clever use of language and rhyme – rhythm, too, and truly evokes a musician.

34. You’re killing me here! Sibilance and sentences to death and beyond–why should this sound like crooning? Brilliant, Bjorn. And I like it even more in your voice.

35. i read it a few times.. it’s THAT good 🙂

36. You are a masterful poet, sir. I love the last line especially. It will stay with me, I’m sure.

37. Oh, Bjorn, you’re so natural to this form…nicely flowing, and no musician will deprived of music in his brain, even if he/she resign….

38. Hi Bjorn,
    You made lovely music using only words. Many exquisite phrases. I’m reminded of a line from a Doors song: “When the music’s over, turn out the light.” That song keeps playing through my brain as I read these stories.
    Didn’t know archaic German was so old. I like to be accurate and in retrospect wish I had just said eighteenth century German. I know the history of English, including the fact that the core of the language is Germanic, but know little about the history of German.
    Ron

39. Master poet, Bjorn, this was such a delight. I enjoyed your recitation. It brought such another dimension to your words to hear them spoken and to hear their rhythm. Excellent!

40. Your chosen words are deafening. Great stuff, Bjorn.

41. Great rondeau with shades of beat poetry–very successful, Bjorn.

42. I really enjoyed reading along as you read. I started playing electric music as a teenager and played with some extremely loud guitarist and drummers. Today, I have a hard time understanding the vocals due to my hearing damage. This one really hit home.

43. The beauty of your piece stems from the fact that you enjoy and dwell in rhymes!

44. I really enjoyed this, Bjorn – I raise my hat to you (well, I would if I was wearing one lol)

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