foghorn and hibiscus tears

At the harbor by Judith Clay

At the harbor by Judith Clay



like ripe cherries
she’s a hibiscus
in the morning dread
harbor wakened – foghorns
wails – wooh wooh

but still among the ships
missing
missing
always missing
S/S Endeavor

wooh wooh – horn laments

gone for many months
promise of a swift
return – fading fading
washed away in
cold November rain

she’ll have fish again
sharing with
the child – growing
waiting to come out
waiting for his smile
that left them for
adventures of the sea

tears are cold as ice
blending with November rain
wooh wooh


Today at dVerse poetics Claudia shares wonderful pictures by Judith Clay to write poetry to. Pub opens at 3 PM EST.

August 24, 2013

45 responses to “foghorn and hibiscus tears

  1. Oh, what a sad face she has as she waits for her sailor to return. I hear the foghorn & feel her hopefulness beneath her hopelessness. The November sea is cold and bleak, but it is good to hear that a child will be born to give joy its rebirth.

  2. oh what a tale…the child growing inside her, waiting on a father whose thirst was more for adventure…it is a very sad tale….love the sound effect, ha….i can hope for them…

  3. oh heck… being the wife of a sailor is no fun… and even more when a little one is growing inside you and a woman needs so much more protection than usually… cool on the sound effect inclusion as well björn

  4. Beautiful, there’s a legend in Hong Kong about a woman and child that turned to stone from grief while waiting for a fisherman to return. Wonderful use of Judith’s art –

  5. …oh, so sad when one has to go away, leave the family for quite a time to work for a greener pasture & better future… very timely told Bjorn as many have to go in same situation… in working for a better promise of living among his wife & child he has to go away & miss a lot of chances to live close with family….what a struggle in both sides… excellent write & pick of artwork to go with your poem… smiles…

  6. That is beautiful. The wooh wooh only adds into the essence of the poem and I liked the effect it produces.
    Her longing is beautifully represented. I really liked it.

  7. Waiting for sailor-man with a gift in hand.The anticipation of waiting can be exhausting, she looked sad. Your poem clearly strengthen the sombre mood in the pic. Great one Bjorn!

    Hank

  8. I really felt the emotion. I was pulled in as if I was standing in the distance watching her under my own umbrella – feeling the cold rain, the sound of the boat, and her sadness in the air. Excellent indeed.

  9. They stand at the dock’s edge, they weep & stare out at the flat horizon of the sea, and their aching loneliness is almost unbearable, for too often, the sea shall claim their loved one, forcing the sailor to return the earth’s briny salty womb, ready or not, plucking off their appendages and fitting them for fins & gills; an old tale, a sickly sweet story, and you put us there with a near perfect illustration of Judith’s art; thanks.

  10. You have me walking along fisherman’s Wharf in SF, dodging seals and trying to pull myself back together while half of me is still out at the cliff house holding a cold fish to my heart in the fog. WhooHoo.

  11. Living in Seattle much of my life foghorns were everyday sounds that always seemed to bid a welcome as well as define a longing..something you get across with this inspired story.

  12. Björn – great piece. i think your poem was a wonderful reflection of Ms. Clay’s artwork.

  13. Hibiscus tears – not really an oxymoron but the thought of hibiscus is so brilliant happy shiny smiling – and yet this is a melancholy piece. Like Madame Butterfly though I think the characters dreams of happier days. Perhaps her man will return, the flowers will bloom as the sun shines ’round her back door again.

  14. waiting…well, the fate of wife in sailor/military family…sounds/sensations help to feel/to be with her…growing baby…and hope for sooner reunion of family. ~ nice use of picture

  15. This was lovely & sad at the same time..waiting for the ship to return..fog horns leave a mystic impression..waiting for her
    child’s arrival and her lover’s embrace..

  16. Bjorn, this piece, with its melancholy foghorn almost mocking her… and the child, and the waiting. It’s all too real these days, and you brought that home to me without beating me over the head.

    Loved the “Hibiscus Girl” of the title… I’m rooting for her! Amy

  17. Bjorn, I love this. The wife of a man who goes away for his work has a special lament, and you captured it very well here with the wife of a seaman!

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