I step a little bit outside Japan to Korea at Carpe Diem, and give you a Sijo.
Three lines with 14-16 syllables each, that I have cut into three stanzas each having it separate topic or development. A little bit outside haiku, but still a lot of similar thoughts.
underneath the galaxies,
we transcend into infinity
twinkling lanterns vibrate,
as shouts of silence overwhelms
togetherness at mountain tarn,
I realize our loneliness
July 13, 2013
So poetic! The first stanza feels like flying holding hands of your love and when you talk of loneliness, I can imagine two lovers glad to finally be rid of the world that is constantly chasing them…lovely phrases as usual!
Thank you. Sijo is a wonderful form that gives great new opportunities. I tried it the first time a couple of weeks ago.
Breathtaking… Impressive work, Bjorn.. 🙂
Thank you.. You should try it, there is a wonderful article at dVerse by Samuel Peralta a couple of months ago.
Yes, you inspired me to work on it.. I will look through the article to know more about it. Thanks.
I am going to have to try me one of these Sijo … great poem… and thanks for the explanation of form
Sijo is a treasure chest to explore.
Another beautiful poem. You have been productive today, haven’t you?
Ahh. I sit and write a little.. more reading actually.
I have more or less been reading all day and writing a little.
I like this Sijo form and of course yours is perfect! I need a place to remember these forms cuz this won’t stay in my brain. Will just visit your blog.
Check out http://dversepoets.com/2013/04/25/form-for-all-from-out-of-asia/
So sad, and I love the picture!
Just the right touch of heartbreak at the end. Beautiful.
interesting form and you did well with it
Though i also went with loneliness, we ended up on completely different planets (and that’s the beauty). Your Sijo makes my thoughts take a flight.
I like this Sijo … I am not that familiar with this poetry form, but it looks great, maybe I should try it myself, but then I first have to study it.
Yes it’s a wonderful form actually, very lyrical, but still the necessity of a twist at the end
this one soars and dips leaving one pondering his existence….