Free 33 words today in trifextra. So my offering is a little quatrain of 33 words.
Woman fastening her garter by Edouard Manet
her sweet appearance left him so nonplussed
he was by lull of sweetest voice then sussed
so sighed and sank deep in her bosom nice
and therefore never felt his throat was sliced
July 5, 2013
Björn Rudbergs writings 
I love the end. 🙂
🙂 a little blood always help
What a way to go! Good one!
As the film would say:
The end
a woman you do not want to tangle with…
(not every woman slices….)
loved this.
I agree… some women have fangs instead 🙂
touche, my friend.
But not me, I don’t bite, (well..not always)
Have a great weekend 🙂
surprise!! ☺
Fantastic!
This reads like a nursery rhyme, all sweet and tender until the end. Love this “slice” of life.
Very nice!
Wicked cool ending!
Excellent!
Brilliant fun!
eek – you turned the tide on me at the end (but at least only my lulled senses were sliced to the quick!)
Great ending and great pairing with the painting. Also love the sounds you used.
Oh man this is brilliant 😀
excellent word choices in the final 2 lines
well done
yeow..deadly bosom. Excellent story !
Whoa! Surprise.
Well, at least he died happy! 😉 Love how you matched your words with the picture.
I agree with Lance, the final 2 lines are perfect!
Perfect slice at the end! You have a knack for this!
I must admire you for the very apt pictures you bring forth in every post.
An intriguing, seductive and a little horrifying tale…
Methinks that he died happy…
i felt like i was reading an old classic poem. you always write something different and impressive.
Wow. I love single thing about this Bjorn! How wonderful! 😀
Yikes! I bet he’d rethink that nice bosom if he could. 😉
gotta watch those bosoms 🙂 Never pass up a member of the IBTC 🙂
oh so boy, lol. enjoyed, bjorned. have you read _water for elephants_? reminds me of a scene in the text.
I was sure I commented on Friday…anyway, Björn – the rhyme makes this piece all the more wonderfully gruesome. You really do know how to make the most of 33 words. Excellent.
A horror story in iambic pentameter–lovely.
Ooh, dark; unexpected ending! Nice.
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Good one, Bjorn! I’m retitling the painting though. “Woman hiding knife in her garter.” I hope Manet won’t mind;)
Of course she is hiding a knife
I loved the way he was lulled.
Not only brilliant, he could never write a faulty phrase.
ohh, nice! I love the ending.
Poor fellow…that’s what he gets for being so easily distracted by the female form…he missed the substance. Clever!
At least he died happy, or so one would think! Wicked fun. Thanks for linking up. Please remember to return for the voting!
Really love the end, the first time I read this, I cackled so much, you’d think I was Ursula the sea witch.
Ha, that made me happy
Morbid… love it! >:)