Līgo Haībun Challenge ~ Down At The Crossroad … and the song got me thinking about hitchhiking, and a break-up seems a good way to include the prompt. I got a little suggestion for improvement by @jmbhatt and have added a sentence
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I watch her leaving for the crossroads with
her blond hair shining in the setting sun
the dress I gave her swaying round her hips
she said she’s leaving, never to return
I must accept decisions that she’s made
the hazy light might be from whirling dust
or from some moisture floating in my eyes
I see her raise her thumb and hear the truck
of course it stops, it’s easy for a girl
and then an engine telling me goodbye
I sigh and from the ice chest grab a beer
we parted at the crossroads long ago
it’s over and I strangely feel relief
it’s over but my crossroads are entangled
~~
dusty clouds
cold beer in my hand
she has left
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March 31, 2013
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Great capture of a moment!
Thank you 😉
a different take 🙂
My trade mark
🙂
Very nice mix of feelings, great haiku.
Thank you 🙂
seems like a grand moment indeed, as relief was in need
Yes, after the suffering. it was most likely a relief
This is beautifully told and very evocative.
Thank you 🙂 It’s what I got from the prompt.
I very much like when you write sad and bleak. Very nice.
Somehow the melancholic style suits me. I think I like it when I read too. Not everything in life is big passion. It might just happen and we continue.
yes.
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like the feeling conveyed and the two types of verse together/ perfectly stated
Thank you .. a little bit unorthodox perhaps to mix metered verse with haiku
you got this one in the bag… the moment felt very very real. it wasn’t tearful or anything.. very believable.
Yes, the sadness and anger was probably already in the past
You empathize with the narrator. and a good haiku towards the end
Thank you 🙂
LOVE the juxtaposition of engine and girl saying goodbye! Great play on words with crossroads being entangled.
Thank you .. that’s a great compliment.
♥ i love the way your chose to write this…like a poem. i felt the lightness of the moment as one was relieved to be leaving and the other relieved the moment was over. thanks for a great story. ♥
Thank you. It is written as a prose poem actually. Except for the last line I kept the story to iambic pentameter (or blank verse..) It is so effective to write in.. what worked for Shakespeare works here to.
you’re welcome and i am happy for your explanation on your style. writing is a new adventure for me so new vocabulary is always a welcome. i will have to come back now and read your story with the new concepts in place. thanks, Bjorn. 🙂
A wonderful topic, and the take full of hope, mystery, expectation, worry, interest ec – very nice.
Thank you… To me it came easily that crossroads can be about parting. And I think this parting happens in many small steps. I know it’s not true haibun to use blank-verse in the story telling… but I think it fits well. Wonder what Shakespeare and Basho could have created together…?
You made me chuckle there! Indeed! What a meeting – I think that idea alone would make a wonderful long poem, just about their meeting!
It would be a great project. Maybe a collaborative poetry project. Hmm…
You mean like a renga, going on for some time, yes, maybe that would be very interesting,
“If Shakespeare met with
Basho and composed something…..
or
If Basho..
something like that etc…yes
And mix blank-verse and haiku portions… that would be great fun. I will be out travelling next week… but I get very excited about the idea.
Ok, let’s do for the return, that would be great.