Atmospheric Visdare, Trifecta and dVerse sonnet

Once you start to do prompts you see that sooner or later you have to merge them. This combine three prompts. dVerse wants me to write a Miltonian sonnet, Trifecta to use the word lucky in the meaning (producing or resulting in good by chance : favorable) and the excellent picture provided by Visdare. I am not fully satisfied, and might work a little more on it.

hear sounds of tugboats howling far away
the carcasses of ships are seen below
attracting shadow of a passing crow
see skeletons of ships marooned, decay

hear seamen curse the darkness of the bay
for fear of mud banks all the movement’s slow
as oily water spew around the bow
tonight if lucky they’ll arrive at quay

there in a tavern they will spend their gold
fulfillment of the dreams they had at sea
to find a willing girl, release their strifes
with voices deep adventures of the seas are told
they loudly boast about a life as free
but silently they miss their lovely wives

March 28, 2013

62 responses to “Atmospheric Visdare, Trifecta and dVerse sonnet

  1. nice work on the sonnet björn…you make me feel the sailors heart so much here…the trying to be strong and boast but really would give everything to be at home with their wife and kids.. really nicely done and love the pic as well…the water looks like milk..

  2. man, really good…you brought the atmosphere alive in the port but also the tavern as well…would not mind sitting in for a draught and to hear a few of the stories…and nice nod to the fact they miss their families as well…when i was on the road i did as well…….that is a pretty amazing pic…

  3. I do like all of it but really loved the imagery of your description of the photo. Took me into that place. Quite a challenge. Am off to look up Visdare.

  4. You raised the bar high with these intertwined prompts but performed a clean jump. So well executed.

  5. Wow…a wonderful combination of prompts…intriguing story you write within this sonnet…loved it.

  6. Very well-written, also reads well out loud. Moby Dick is one of my favorite novels, and this poem reminded me of it–thanks!

  7. This is a really striking sonnet, which conjures such imagery (making the picture pail in comparison to your imagination). It stuns me that you can combine such prompts with such adeptness.

  8. Bjorn, you have definitely captured the heart and soul of the seaman in your poem! (And written a fine sonnet, to boot!)

  9. Bjorn, your command of English and of a difficult sonnet form is formidable. I loved your use of the picture to speculate; and all three prompts fitted like the fingers of a glove.

  10. Wow, three prompts…you’ve done so well to form this lovely sonnet, it flows beautifully and I can both feel and see this scene so wonderfully conveyed.

  11. Excellent turn about at the end. They must miss their wives silently, or their temporary gals, used to blow of stress, may walk out in anger.
    No one like to admit they are playing a game.

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