47 responses to “A day of joy – trireme sonnet for dVerse”

1. the norwegian fjords…have heard much about their beauty and hope i make it there one day…you just stirred that longing even more with your poem

   • I recommend to use a kayak for extra solitude 🙂

2. What a beautiful photo, and the poem makes it even more lovely!

   • Thank you, 🙂

3. Incredibly clever and a stunning photo as well.

   • Thank you 🙂 I still recall that day….

4. nice…like your end couplet….getting away like that def is good for the soul….used to kayak quite a bit when i lived up north…so serene early in the morning….saw some amazing nature a well…

   • I try to get out as much as I can. Stockholm is amazing for kayaks, a huge archipelago that goes right into the city…

5. I very much like this – especially using the beauty of the day to stockpile memories against a winter of depression … am familiar with the technique (coincidentally, used a mirrored surface photo also…)

   http://leapinelephants.blogspot.ca/2013/02/beneath-mirrored-surface.html

   • I am always carried through dark times by memories

6. I love spending time on the water… nature’s symphonic sounds, the smell of sea… so peaceful.

   • Water, mountains yes, that is were you gather strength

7. A joyful day with a loved one is a treasure ~ A memory to keep us warmth against winter ~ Good work on the form ~

   • Thank you Grace 🙂

8. This is beautiful. I think we all need a day of joy sometimes to make us feel good, to enable us to continue to be happily just who we are. A day of kayaking would be that kind of day! (I have done it a time or two.)

   • Thank you, and I totally agree. That’s why I love to bring back my pictures to get the poetry out of my head….

     Very few of my poems have been done without finding a picture first.

9. One day of joy and fun (especially in nature) can bring a lifetime of warm memories for those cold, depressive days of winter. Very nice…love the serene feel.

   • Thank you .. it does, especially when you’ve written a poem about it.

10. Great imagery created in the poem. The photo reminds me of the fjordland on the south island of NZ. Simply amazing. Thanks for sharing.

    • I’ve never been told they are similar, and actually I talked to some guys from NZ who said it was very similar.

11. That you can “continue to be [me] yourself” stuck me as an odd verse. For what would you be otherwise? Or was the kayak time so rejuvenating that it allowed rest, strength to continue a harder life?

    I am envious of that trip (loved the pic). I kayak too, but you made me envy your trip both in the words and the photo.

    • My thought with that line was more on continue to be me (a true self) and not adopt too much to a “normal” life. So you have interpreted it correctly.

      I kayak at home in Stockholm too, where we have a beautiful archipelago. Right now it’s still covered in ice, so skates are more suitable. But going back to the fjords are on my list of summer treats to do.

      • Ah, thank you for the confirmation. I use to live in ocean areas with islands, but now am stuck kayaking on rivers and lakes (which have their own beauty of course). And like you, the glide, release and intimacy with the water is one of the most rejuvenating experience on my list. Here is a short poem I wrote about my quiet time with a seagull while kayaking.

        May the ice melt soon so you can get back on the water!

12. As I said, I enjoy ekphrastic poetry, and even more so when I can view the inspiration (your photograph) right next to the poem. And isn’t it even more joyous to have captured your memories of that day in a poem as well? Well done.

    • It is indeed, I have found that the values of my photographs have increased tremendously when I can add poetry to it. As a matter of fact I find writing poetry without a picture extremely challenging.

13. It must feel freeing to kayak on such a beautiful fiord and commune with nature…your poem makes great use of the sonnet form …would look nice framed beside your photo on a wall 😉

    • Thank you,. it is indeed lovely to glide through the water in a kayak.. No better sense of freedom.

14. we just communicate in whispered words- Sums up this beautiful and wonderful picture. Really great poem

    • Thank you so much. I loved the form, but so tricky to find enough rhymes… 🙂 usual sonnet is much easier.

15. Bjorn, this is an amazing poem! That opening verse took my breath away and all the way though the poem I went wow, wow, wow. And that couplet at the end was superb. What a closing!

    • Thank you. I love iambic poetry. I think I will combine a sonnet with a haiku once again. 🙂

16. Hello there,
    You acquitted yourself beautifully of the task .set. by Sam.
    And the scene of your poem is awe inspiring.

    • Thank you so much, I love the form and by looking through my pics I could tell a story.

17. There’s a serenity in your poem which perfectly complements the photo and the memories that it has helped you to recapture and express so elequently. I’ve had the privilege of visiting some of the Norwegian fjords – and they are truly spectacular. We have something similar on the Scottish west coast – just not quite on the same scale.

    • I have not been to Scotland since I was a little kid. I would love to go there and bring my kayak. I think it would be great. 🙂

      • Kayaking along the west coast is something I’d like to do too 🙂

18. this was so sweet… fit the pic perfect… the word selection was as beautiful as the pic… great job

    • Thank you. It was a joy to write 🙂

19. What a joy to be on the water in a kayak with such amazing beauty around. An experience to treasure through the winter months 🙂

    • Indeed a joy. A treasure through the dark months 🙂 Thank you for reading.

20. We learnt about Norwegian fjords in school in Form Four (16 years of age). And I remember imagining these beautiful breathtaking sceneries. Such solace, no wonder it is easier to be oneself in such surroundings.

    Your poetry, inspired by art of nature, sings!

    Note: I love the haibun form and will try to do haiku / sonnet combinations more often.

21. a day of joy is the important key
    so I can now continue to be me

    I can well imagine the satisfaction and the feelings of having done something right. Looking at the pic, your poetry brings out the reality of
    nature’s beauty. Nicely Bjorn!

    Hank

22. Right! A nice poem urging us to make happenings unifying and worth memoring. Togetherness is primarily constituted by the work upon The Son but I agree experiences of the love of God is important.

23. Your words bring the picture to life!

24. …this has a very important message to tell… to just simply live a day with the real you and happiness will come for sure… your sonnet is really beautiful & soft…not weighing too much…but just to simply go on… read & be mesmerized… i liked it a lot…great take… smiles…

    • Thank you, I truly believe that a single day can be your savior in dark times. Thank you for reading 🙂

25. An amazing photograph, and your poem describes well that need to reconnect with something beyond the daily drudgery! Thanks. k.

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