Before the tears – Visdare Villanelle

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I could not come up with a good idea to make a contuing story in Visdare this time, so instead I offer you a Villanelle, which I think is a beutiful form to write poetry on.


once I lived without my tears
a joyous life I shared with you
it was before the bad affairs

around the world among the pairs
we were exclusive happy few
once I lived without my tears

we planned a life of many years
and were delighted to be two
it was before the bad affairs

it started when we bought some shares
at first we cheered as values grew
once I lived without my tears

we had success in our careers
and never knew the bank was due
it was before the bad affairs

I never had financial fears
before you left without adieu
once I lived without my tears
it was before the bad affairs
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February 27, 2013

14 responses to “Before the tears – Visdare Villanelle”

  2. G’day Bjõrn,
    First off let me thank you for your visit, and secondly is is so nice to meet a fan of the Villanelle, and you do them so well, it is my favourite genre for poetry

  3. I really like this poem. I guess the central idea is very good but needs more thought-work put in to blossom it to maturity it deserves. I am sure with the kind of love that has been put in the basics the outcome will be even more beautiful.

  5. Ahhh. Tightly knitted, and with such a precise rhyme scheme, too. Reflective, bittersweet – love this piece. Thanks for sharing…looking forward to another installment about Alexandar next time, maybe? 🙂

  6. Well executed Bjorn. I have, now and then delved into other forms of verse and haven’t tried a Villanelle..the repetitive format rings true within the relationship.

    • The Villanelle is a beatiful form. I decided to do it in tetrameter this time, but it’s even more pleasant in pentameter I think. Some of the stanzas above could probably become better if I reworked the poem to 10 syllables. 🙂

      • I think it’s quite well done, Sir. I know what you mean about pentameter, it seems there can be a bit more meat on the bones of the lines, so to speak.

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