The four seasons – Alliterative verse

I wrote a little alliterative verse trying to use some of the excellent tools provided by Gay at dVerse. I think i used a few of the tricks. The starkness of the seasons in Scandinavia, compared to the short bliss of summer is what I wanted to show here. Picture is taken a summer day in Bergen, Norway.

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come winter withers all the warmth inside
we freeze and fret and in frustration hide
with deep depression and in darkness we survive

but see how ever slowly spring evolve
the life of lightness will us liberate again
from melting maladies sing merry glad refrain

then summer singing sinfully its melody
in greenery so gracefully is greeting everybody
we bathe in blue and boldly sip the sun

with rain we ruefully retreat inside cocoon
and silently and suffering we see the autumn come
a year has yielded only yearning for the sun
—-
February 14, 2013

43 responses to “The four seasons – Alliterative verse

  1. you…you alliterate well…in each line no less….winter will pass soon enough…i cant wait for spring though…all the new life bursting forth…i am ready…smiles..yearning the sun…yep…i got it…though i do love autumn…

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  3. …some nice rhyming but i have hoped for a bit consistence in your meter… i just felt like having this in meter form can fit very well to your chosen subject… your lines are singing like a tiny sestina in new format… wonderful to read and i enjoyed it… smiles…

  4. You take a romp through the seasons and make it new with your diction, choice of images and inversion–choice to put the verbs on the end–as well as the alliteration. I like your final line best.

    • The diction as well as the verb was a little bit of the puzzle of getting the alliteration the way it should, and the final line is the conclusion (the only on with any sense in it) Thank you for your feedback. It was a fun poem to write.

      I might take a second round of it.

      Björn

  5. Marvellous ! Love it ! It reminds me very strongly of old Viking and Saxon poetry. Have you noticed that a strict structure ( no alliteration intended) actually gives the poem life and vitality ?

  6. I live in the Sonora Desert; so I deeply appreciate the chance to vicariously experience seasonal extremes. You offer that up nicely, with terrific use of alliteration.

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