I wrote a little alliterative verse trying to use some of the excellent tools provided by Gay at dVerse. I think i used a few of the tricks. The starkness of the seasons in Scandinavia, compared to the short bliss of summer is what I wanted to show here. Picture is taken a summer day in Bergen, Norway.
come winter withers all the warmth inside
we freeze and fret and in frustration hide
with deep depression and in darkness we survive
but see how ever slowly spring evolve
the life of lightness will us liberate again
from melting maladies sing merry glad refrain
then summer singing sinfully its melody
in greenery so gracefully is greeting everybody
we bathe in blue and boldly sip the sun
with rain we ruefully retreat inside cocoon
and silently and suffering we see the autumn come
a year has yielded only yearning for the sun
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February 14, 2013
Björn Rudbergs writings 
you…you alliterate well…in each line no less….winter will pass soon enough…i cant wait for spring though…all the new life bursting forth…i am ready…smiles..yearning the sun…yep…i got it…though i do love autumn…
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BR: a fine poem & image, and i’ve reposted…thx for sharing! RT
Thank you 🙂
I love your alliteration.
Thank you Alice 🙂
Oh, this is gorgeous. I especially liked: in greenery so gracefully is greeting everybody
we bathe in blue and boldly sip the sun
Thank you, thank you Susan. It was a joy to write and I’m glad you liked it.
liked your passion for passing seasons…. winter can go anytime now
Ah, still at least a month away here in Sweden…
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Love your seasons… especially winter and summer.
Thank you. 🙂
Clever way with words…
Thank you Ted.
Some great alliteration…much enjoyed my walk through the season.
Thank you. It was fun to write, it’s a little bit like laying puzzles…
…some nice rhyming but i have hoped for a bit consistence in your meter… i just felt like having this in meter form can fit very well to your chosen subject… your lines are singing like a tiny sestina in new format… wonderful to read and i enjoyed it… smiles…
Thank you, I wanted to avoid meteríng but rather have each line with 3 alliterative stresses and one stress without,
cool allits and oh…can’t wait for spring to throw her budding flowers across the land…sigh..cool write mr. viking…smiles
Thank you Claudia.
nice alliteration and i like the internal rhyme
I’m so glad you liked it.
This is brilliant, I love alliteration and you have done it so well.
Thank you 🙂 alliteration is fun, and has a strong background in ancient Nordic poetry.
Yep, definitely yearning for the sun. Lovely summing up of a year passing.
Thank you… yes it’s still to dark for my liking.
the dance of life
Indeed 🙂
You take a romp through the seasons and make it new with your diction, choice of images and inversion–choice to put the verbs on the end–as well as the alliteration. I like your final line best.
The diction as well as the verb was a little bit of the puzzle of getting the alliteration the way it should, and the final line is the conclusion (the only on with any sense in it) Thank you for your feedback. It was a fun poem to write.
I might take a second round of it.
Björn
Marvellous ! Love it ! It reminds me very strongly of old Viking and Saxon poetry. Have you noticed that a strict structure ( no alliteration intended) actually gives the poem life and vitality ?
I am a big fan of structure. And I totally agree. I looked a lot on old Edda verses when writing this.
I live in the Sonora Desert; so I deeply appreciate the chance to vicariously experience seasonal extremes. You offer that up nicely, with terrific use of alliteration.
Thank you, I lived in Pheonix for a year with quite different season variations …
absolutely adore alliteration and amazed at your ardent attempt
🙂
Lovely….
Thank you 🙂
An arctic lament! You conveyed your seasons so well , without whining. ( like those of us in the temperate zones often do!
We whine, here too, but to no avail
Wonderful
It was fun to write