22 responses to “Haiku Height – shroud”

1. I created a ‘cloud shroud’ also. I love the mystery in yours though!

   • Clouds are nice in pictures and in haiku

2. Awesome! You have used the cascading form … wow. These haiku are beautiful … though you have used the prompt different than I did.

   Chevrefeuille a.k.a. Basho2012

   • Clouds are less doleful than other meanings of the word

3. I like the cascading haiku of summer secret ~

   • Good, I think it concludes the sentiments, so it should be best. Thank you

4. I like how each new stanza begins with the last line that was written.. I found it very beautiful! Thank you for the recent follow and your kind words for my haiku! It’s a pleasure meeting you! Looking forward to reading more of your work.

   • It is a wonderful meeting place indeed and thank you

5. I loved the shrouding of the sun rays by the clouds … good thought here !!!

   • Thank you… didn’t want the anything more lugubrious….

6. The cascading haiku is so remeniscent of the waves of the sea. I wonder what is your summer secret?

   • Ah, best secrets remain secret. 🙂

7. Beautiful cascading haiku and very well written

   • Thank you 🙂

8. I like this! 🙂

   • Thanks 🙂

9. aloha Brudberg – cool image. i like what you have going in that last haiku:

   shrouded wealth below
   remains a summer secret
   captured in my heart

   i’ve adapted to the more recent understanding of ku and why 5-7-5 is not a requirement – particularly in English. there is a lot of documentation on this now and it makes a lot of sense for a number of reasons. it’s possible to write good ku as 5-7-5 altho for English i think it’s an unnecessary challenge when writing good ku is hard enough…

   one of the things i’ve found i no longer do is add extra words to make the 5-7-5 – which often means written ku flow more smoothly (a higher priority the way i see it for ku). it also allows me to pare down ku to get at the essential ku. so i might write this ku this way:

   shrouded wealth
   a summer secret
   in my heart

   i hope you dont mind that i’ve said this. i think you have a solid ku to be exploring here. very cool on that. – aloha.

   • Don’t mind at all, I am well aware about this, and maybe 353 is better… I have written a few haiku that are not 5-7-5. Still 5-7-5 is my “security blanket”, and it sounds good within my head. Thank you for your comment. 🙂

10. I love this, it makes me think you have dived and explored the hidden secrets of the deep oceans and stored all those memories away where they can never fade. It’s beautiful.

    • Thank you for your kind comment. Mentally there are hidden treasures there below.

11. A wondrous weaving!

    Enshrouding

    • Thank you 🙂

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