Kitao wrote
when the peonies bloomed,
it seemed as though there were
no flowers around them
First the first line makes me think of loss, the peonies are not blooming anymore. The beauty has faded, does that means we know what comes instead, we cannot say, but at the moment captured the poet is only focused on that single loss. I wanted to capture a similar feeling, but I wanted to bring in the sense of smell, and looking through the list of kigo I found wild roses that would fit perfectly.
vase of wild roses –
room was filled with sweet perfume
until they withered
Rose Trees White Roses by Henri Fantin-Latour
Linked to Carpe Diem
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September 1, 2014
Björn Rudbergs writings 
i love when there’s scent in a poem… and wild roses smell so much better than those over-cultured ones…
I was so glad when I found it in a list of kigo (season-words)…
Which list of kigo do you use, Bjorn? I’ve been trying to find additional sources.
all beauty fades…
and impermenence is the way…
they smell the most pungent
right before death
Your haiku really echoes with that feeling of loss – loss of life, of visual beauty, of perfume — great work Björn 🙂
I found this one in wikipedia… 🙂
I meant great poem — the painting is lovely too — but I was more impressed with your haiku 😉
Ah … the inevitable passage of time … the memories remain but the perfume is gone … beautifully written.
Bjorn, Lovely piece. Wild roses are both beautiful and fragrant. 🙂 —Susan
A wonderfully composed haiku Björn i like how you have told how you came to your haiku. I thank you for granting us a glimps of your composing path … 🙂
Thank you.. 🙂 to me the past tense of the first line was so important… and that feeling was what I what I wanted to bring in..
I like the thought process you shared on how you arrived at your words. As for the roses- withered cut flowers make me sad, so I can feel the ‘loss’ in this.
It was an interesting process to see what I felt from the original poem