A Sunday Blankverse

· by · in blank verse. ·


I’ve struggled gainst the barriers of this week
the weekly waterfall of days now end
I contemplate the diamond of today
when I can suspend a garden swing
In power when released from detailed straps
When I let wrinkled clothes replace the pleats
my tough decision is whatever we should eat
on Monday in my unit – I feel zip

Old Swinging by Fransico Goya

Old Swinging by Fransico Goya


Writing a little blank-verse to exercise my pentameter for Kenia‘s challenge to write about Sunday at toads, I combined it with the words of Sunday Whirl–
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April 6, 2014

29 responses to “A Sunday Blankverse”

  1. Bjorn, I think you have a great talent untapped in blank verse–you should really do more of it. Forms are good things I imagine but when I read something like this you write I imagine a head full of poetry waiting to be birthed. >KB

  6. I’m all for wrinkled clothes myself. I hope you find more than zip waiting in your heart when you decide to return to its depths…

  12. You have really conveyed the sense of suspension–that image of the swing is really sharp, and also of the weight of that waterfall always waiting, of emotions being drowned so that even when you surface for awhile in a calm spot, there’s only nothing(at least I assume you are meaning that definition of zip, and not liveliness, which would change it.) Loved this, Bjorn.

  13. i’m accustomed to your haiku, this poetry side is new to me; interesting facet to your diamond soul

    have a nice Sunday

    much love…

  24. I love your image and your waterfall. YOU made the week free fall around me and I wished I was swinging. 😀 Well Done

  26. I like the joy of your verse. Zippity do da in the zephyr! 🙂

    I think my character ‘Waban’ might be more like an absent minded professor, with maybe a tad bet of dementia creeping in.

    I have/had relative with dementia. It is not an easy thing to cope with. Caregivers can only do their best – it can’t be easy for the people with the disease either. I remember a movie with Goldie Hawn, as a young woman – she had a different disease where she literally woke up each day starting anew.

    Thanks for stopping by. I appreciate all your visits.

  27. I love the phrase “the diamond of today”. We only ever live in the moment don’t we. The last moment is gone and the next one doesn’t exist as yet. We live from moment to moment.

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