The veils of our mirrored maze – Villanelle

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I met you deep inside the mirrored maze
with chemicals in shadowed gauzy veils
my dream’s deception is your absent gaze

and far away I’ll glimpse the sunny days
while zephyr snapshots whisper dying tales
I met you deep inside the mirrored maze

the twisted mirrors cloak our roads in haze
your fingers carve me deep like rusty nails
my dream’s deception is your absent gaze

togetherness in sleep – the price to pay
another bottled bliss from back-street sales
I met you deep inside the mirrored maze

and soundlessly on clouds you drift away
I’m left behind, in dark and chthonic jails
my dream’s deception is your absent gaze

I walk on leaded feet in smoke filled blase
as mirrors guide my way through brimstone gales
I met you deep inside the mirrored maze
my dream’s deception is your absent gaze

From Wikimediacommons

From Wikimediacommons



A long time since I ventured to write a Villanelle, but when Grace has us to write about mirrors at Toads I thought I venture this. Somehow writing a Villanelle is a little bit like finding your way trough a maze of mirrors. I intend to link this to Poetry Pantry as well.
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April 5, 2014

35 responses to “The veils of our mirrored maze – Villanelle”

  1. This is an intricate piece… so different. I have to look up Villanelle… you poets have a lot going on. I liked this line, Bear… I walk on leaded feet in smoke filled blase.

    • Villanelle is a form that’s really fascinated with it’s nested lines.. I wrote it quite a lot before reading (and hearing) Dylan Thomas… then I humbly refrained from even trying for quite some time.

  2. I listened to your reading ~ The refraining lines of the villanelle worked so well, it was an hypnotic mirrored maze ~ The intricate pattern is so well done that I didn’t mind the dark theme ~

    Thanks for linking up with Real Toads Bjorn ~ Hope you are enjoying your break ~ Happy weekend ~

  3. Grace says it better than I…”The refraining lines of the villanelle worked so well, it was an hypnotic mirrored maze ~ The intricate pattern is so well done that I didn’t mind the dark theme ~”

    For me it read to be spoken out loud … read and feel the awesome twists and turns.

    Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece
    Peace
    Siggi

  6. I loved hearing your voice, so many layers and perception in your poem! I love the twisting n’ turning of your trance like projection!
    Bravo~

  7. ‘The locked up self in dark and grim reality of aging dreaming about sunny days’…I like to read the poem like this…a perfect content for the form…

  11. I met you deep inside the mirrored maze
    my dream’s deception is your absent gaze

    That basically sums it all. One needs to be aware of the surroundings so as not to be coaxed into anything adverse. Great write Bjorn!

    Hank

  12. Great use of the form, Björn! Some very strong and somewhat mysterious imagery. “my dream’s deception is your absent gaze” – this strikes me as a very sad image.

  13. I have been procrastinating from writing a villanelle for such a long time because they are so difficult to write. You did an excellent job and I am definitely going to write one for poetry month.

  14. Oooh! What an absolute delight to hear you read your words, Bjorn. They lend a wealth of tone and mood to the immaculate villanelle (a favourite form of mine to read, but very difficult to write as well as this.)

    Thank you for a remarkable poetic experience this morning.

  15. I’m having a ‘bad hair day’ and a twisted mirror would suit me fine at the moment. Excuses, excuses. And self-deception of course.
    Kudos for the villanelle outing today.

  19. Remarkable. I find these very difficult to write, and you’ve done it so well. Really great lines:

    I met you deep inside the mirrored maze
    my dream’s deception is your absent gaze

  20. I enjoyed the refrain powerful words ..I met you deep inside the mirrored maze..sometimes it is hard to find one’s way in those mazes. Wonderful work Bjorn..

  22. I haven’t read (or written) much poetry lately, and I’ve always found the various poetry forms hard. This is absolutely beautiful! Dark and twisted, but beautiful!

  23. Fabulous villanelle.!! I had to google to understand what ‘villanelle’ is all about…I enjoyed hearing your voice, brudberg! 🙂

  28. Blown Away! The cadence of the villanelle (I too, had to look it up) – utterly haunting – and your reading of the piece – just lovely. I closed my eyes and was carried off.

  31. the refrains from a villanelle can be hypnotic. i think it is a difficult form to write, but you made it looked so simple. and i liked the dark theme. 🙂

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