Parting with your letter – Friday Fictioneers.

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The way the sky blushes as it’s kissed by the rising sun, reminds me of your cheeks that November night when we become a unity, so long ago.

Now when all is lost I reread the letter that I have tossed so many times and recovered from the waste-paper basket.

Though words are harsh I still adore your handwriting and I find it hard to let it go

But when the sunshine erases the darkness of night where we took farewell I put a lighted match to your letter.

After all it can be considered evidence, if you finally resurface.
(100 words)

Copyright Ted Strutz

Copyright Ted Strutz


This week my mind went sinister. Hope you enjoyed it.

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November 27, 2013

41 responses to “Parting with your letter – Friday Fictioneers.”

  4. Boy, did you sucker me there! I was appreciating poetry, feeling sensitive, thinking about how chicks love sensitive guys who appreciate poetry, and WHAM! A dead body! It was effective though. Great job with two genres!

  5. I can only echo what the others have said. Love the twist. And may I add, it is nice to see a character worry about evidence and take proactive steps to destroy it 😉

  7. I didn’t see that coming. It started out so sweet, fondly remembering happy times, then boom! He’s burning the letter from his old flame.

  9. Ha…everything is written beautifully by you. But I must ask, are you taking advice from AnElephant? haha

  14. While i was reading this I was thinking about love letters from my ex. I was thinking about how I burned them one night and became wistful at not still having them. And then I read on…haha…perfect…but my ex is alive and well…I swear!

  16. Hi Bjorn,
    Taking a break from writing this week and just enjoying stories from my favorite writers. I thought your story was a sweet love ode until that shattering last line. Very well wrought. Ron

  17. Dear Bjorn,

    ‘But when the sunshine erase the darkness of night where we took farewell I put a lighted match to your letter.’ Does not ‘erase’ need to be ‘erases’?

    You tell me and I won’t tell the police what you did.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  19. The hesitation over the letter in the bin shows a mind in a quandry but I expected lovesick, not the outcome you created. I wasn’t disappointed. Well written, Bjorn.

  26. You broke my heart, so I fed you to the fishes. The tale starts out so complimentary, but I don’t think there was much remorse at the end. A very well written piece, Bjorn.

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