Carpe Diem Tan Renga is to write a completion to the haiku by Buson. The completion should be 7-7 making the completed poem a tanka. After reading a little I spent extra energy on that the middle line (the bridge) should be able to be separated into two separate three-line poem. I hope it works.
The haiku by Buson is:
in the stillness
between the arrival of guests
the peonies

Peonies by William Merritt Chase
in the stillness
between the arrival of guests
the peonies
outshining the visitors
in their vibrant kimonos
June 12, 2013
Oh yes, it works very well!
Thank you 😉
perfect. ♥
Gorgeous, Bjorn.
Excellent, Bjorn 🙂
Works beautifully!
This one has turned out to be really picturesque and live! Done nicely!
Awesome Bjorn … a wonderful completion of the Tan Renga, I like the comparison with the colorful kimonos.
I see the silken Kimonos and the flowers blushing at being out-bloomed 🙂
Petulant Blossoms
Wonderful!