In Carpe Diem Freestyle I choose to share a sedoka I wrote a couple of weeks ago when it was the Form there. As this is much less explored poetry I have chosen to keep the syllable count. The form is 577 577 and the two parts should describe the same event from two different views.
Kingfisher by Ohara Koson
see winged jewellery
under crying willows
an acrobatic kingfisher
silver from the brook
unwillingly a small fish
decorate the hungry bird
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July 5, 2013
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Very nice sedoka! I love the idea of looking at the scene from two perspectives! Also love the h umor of the fish as jewelry for the bird (fleetingly)
Thank you.. yes Sedoka is nice. A little bit wordy for haiku poets perhaps 🙂
an excellent choice – I always admire your eye for art
Thank you.. It seems like my blog is starting to be about art and poetry 🙂
I didn’t incorporate the two perspectives since that is out of my league apparently at the moment. Beautiful imagery and you got the hardest part down. I know you can do a love poem this way.
yes I did this first for Sam’s prompt but then changed to the other I did.
I learn something new nearly every time I visit you. I never heard of a sedoka. Very cool. Great imagery.
I didn’t know what sedoka is. Very beautiful, and light, and illustrates the form so well. Nice!
I read that sedoka is an obscure form – leave it to you!
Seriously, there is a lovely feeling of nature’s stillness….
Beautiful presentation – again. I can imagine this on a wall, framed, the verse on rice paper.
I am not familiar with this poetry form, but I like it a lot. Maybe I have to try it once.
I think it was by tradition more spoken or sung than written, so many poems are lost or forgotten.. But it is an interesting form to explore.
I love to try it. I understand that the sedoka also uses a syllables count. 5-7-7 5-7-7 isn’t it?
Exactly.. And I have tried to keep it at least in the two I have written.