Sometimes a picture is simply to good to write a good story to. This week’s Visdare is a real beauty. Then I recalled my own rule, write the exact opposite of what your first impression are. I used exactly 150 words this time.
Pain was excruciating, he had only wanted to capture that succulent piece of meat that dangled in front of him. He had a family to feed so despite the pain he fought like he had never fought before.
Finally he had to surrender the invisible foe that just pulled and pulled at his tormented mouth. Now he lay there slowly suffocating, feeling his sensitive skin burning from a summer sun.
A monster of horrendous ugliness stared him deeply into his mouth still throbbing with pain. Was this creature the last sight he would ever see? Would he soon feel the soothing water of afterlife?
The creature said:
“Bleh, I hate fish Pa, I’d much rather have burgers, release this ugly beast, please Pa”
He should have been offended by such words, but when he felt the cold water moistening his mail, and he could breathe again he forgave the beast.
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May 3, 2013
Björn Rudbergs writings 
You are right going with the opposite impression a complete turn around here – well done BR.:-)
Thank you Rambly… I had to do something different.
I love the ending.
Thank you 🙂
In. Love with this Bjorn. You absolutely did an amazing job of this write.
🙂 thank you. and a sweet happy end.
A nice twist; I enjoyed it… 😉
Thank you 🙂
Quite nice indeed..
Thank you 🙂
Well twisted!
Thank you 😉
I really like this story, Björn. Picture Perfect, if I may say so. I liked the voice of the fish… but I thought the ‘hideous monster’ was pretty cute, and I liked her voice.
The picture is not mine. Visdare is a prompt similar to Visdare… and I agree that the hideous monster is cute, but probably not for a fish in pain… and she saved the fish (though maybe there was a cow somewhere that was less happy,.
Lovely turn around and ending!
Thank you 🙂
well done! The beast, indeed, did the unbeastiest thing.
Indeed, the concept of beast lies in the eyes of the beholder.
Always look forward to reading which route you’ll take in these flash fiction challenges. Enjoyed the different PoV. Very nicely done, Björn :))
Thank you… sometimes a good picture only tell one story. And you have to look very hard for that other story.
Love the “horrendous beast” perspective spin — I like how you deliberately try to increase the challenge by doing the opposite of your first idea. That would keep the challenge eternally fresh!! Great job!
Thank you.. it’s about finding the not so obvious story.
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder. I thought she was quite a pretty little girl, but then I’m not a fish. Really enjoyed the fish’s voice and your story – it’s left me smiling.
I thought she was quite pretty too, but the poor fish had another opinion 😉