28 responses to “Warp of time – trifecta and VisDare triolet”

1. Nice. This is the first time I see a trifecta, I think, and in your hands it is nice. You make me think about being a river, whirling down the hills. And for sure the river needs both its future and its past. It needs justice (the sea). And it needs truth (the rain/well). The Son and The Father. And if the river has no feeling of the sea or the well it will get insane. I know that for sure.

   • Good that you find an interpretation that works for you 😉

2. This has a nice flow (:

   • Thank you 🙂 tune up the guitar and sing.

3. Oh… love: “whorling in a warp of time” – the diction is precise and evocative.

   I’m not sure I have ever seen “whorl” as a verb – is this your own coinage??

   No matter the answer, your poem works for me. 🙂

   barbara @ de rebus
   www(dot)barbaragildea(dot)com/time/

   • I looked it up on thedreedicionary.. and yes it seems to be.

4. I often learn something when I read your work. I had not heard of a triolet. How perfectly appropriate for a trifecta entry. I’ve always loved the word, whorl, like the whorl of a fingerprint. I love the way you’ve put it to use whorling in a warp of time. Great poem – and a great graphic.

   • The graphic is from Visdare. Another great prompt to use.. 🙂 Triolet’s are inspired by french poetry, just like Villanella and Rondeau. Thomas Hardy was a master of triolets. 🙂

5. Such a sweet rhythm and rhyme to tell such a ghastly tale! Love the triolet!

   • It’s fitting trifecta isn’t it? Name comes from the refrain that’s repeated 3 times

6. I feel caught up in the whorl when reading this. Well done.

   • Great That was my hope

7. |Very nice flow to such poignant words 🙂

   • Thank you 🙂

8. A beautiful story unfurled !!!

9. Interesting one. I liked the format, and of course the content.

   • Thank you Ted 🙂

10. My hat is off to anyone who can use one entry to satisfy the flash requirements of two or three different challenges! Lovely work!

    • Ah but this time it was soo easy… time and whorl it all came together..

11. always enjoy your verses – no exception with this one!

    • Thank you John 🙂

12. Nice one! I like the meshing of past and future; the blur in between them is a whorl that makes me think how quickly our moments pass by.

    • Thank you. The picture worked so well for this.

13. wonderfully depicted and visualized!

14. I see why you liked my peaceful death. Your writing feels like torment. Hugs if okay.

15. There’s a lot of energy in this, spinning back and forth – exhausting and thrilling.

    • Thank you

16. I’m always eager to see what writing form you will use to respond to a challenge. Lovely! :)))

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