Gliding cross the water
Into the meeting sun
Creating memories
Material for dreams
And fantasies for trips
Plans for what to do
In summers that will come
Plans take us through
The autumn rains
October through November
Reality in color
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September 14, 2012
Björn Rudbergs writings
Poetry and fiction by a physicist from the dark side
Björn Rudbergs writings 
Lovely this! So quiet and still… Stark. Peaceful. I especially like the way in which it slides gently further into metaphor as the lines go on.
And speaking of metaphor: Regarding the poem I mentioned in the past… the Roddenberry Snippet I shared with you… The trouble with collaboration for me, is that I don’t really know how to go about it, except to say we can all have a try at it and see how it turns out! Although I did mention some humour that I wrote with a friend so many years ago, wherein we took terns writing verses.
In any case, I have been down with a rather nasty cold, and so naturally I chose that time to have a go at that rather daunting little couplet.
The result shall drop into existence on 12/14 at midnight pacific time, if you are interested. I am not altogether displeased with the result, although i may change a word or two between now and then (and possibly after that might lucas a bit, as well–who can say!) I must also thank you for teaching me how to skip words–which I really have been thinking quite a lot about since I discovered your writing. Such a thing was necessary in order to match the overall tone and timbre of the couplet.
Still, I would most certainly be interested in seeing what you might come up with if you felt the muse had taken you.
I look so forward to it. I must say that that challenge was a little bit too much for me, thought maybe they would fit into a Villanelle. I am quite busy trying to do a haiku a day for Carpe Diem. Wonderful way to learn about kigo (season word) that are key to Haiku.
But I have also tried to use old haiku as inspiration for other poems.. And the other way around. Quite fun actually.
Oh yes, sir, very much so! I have found several ways in which several types of haiku can be wrapped up inside sonnets. Most recently, I realised that haiku that use word count instead of syllable count, can be written in iambic pentameter–all three lines–and therefore, can comprise an entire sonnet. Five full haiku of this form, if one uses the first line of the first Haiku as the title of the piece. Cheating perhaps, but it does make a nice neat package. Here is one:
http://davidemeron.com/tag/w45bers5-s/
I recently took an idea of a story embedded iside a haiku by Issa and expanded it to a sonnet. 🙂
https://brudberg.wordpress.com/2012/11/22/carpe-diem-haiku-issa-mountain-spring-peace-bonus-sonnet/