3 responses to “Locked out”

1. I fell so far into this short poetic story that I didn’t realize until a moment ago, after I had read it several times, that you used the line “I’m outside” three times. In my opinion, that means that it was good use of repetition.

   I tend to like repeated words. I tend, in fact, to like repetitious humor. I laugh more and more at each repetition. As everything appears to grow more funny.

   This, of course, is not a funny piece, but it makes good use of repetition.

   • Thank you so much for reading all my old stuff. I have started recently to use repetitions. and this one was more an early experiment that I had forgot.

     • Funny, just today I wrote a sonnet with a repeating line–perhaps, more accurately, A periodic line with a repeating element.

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